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Pushing through the feelings, guess its time I made a start,
As I struggle to find the meaning in the wreck I call my heart,
With the words that I have written and the pain that I have wrought,
With conviction in my mind I say its of you I've always thought.

One eye on my mobile and one eye on the net,
Scouring my soul so deeply for the words I've not said yet,
As I pray for some hope to restore my faith in this,
And cling to the desperate memory of a solitairy kiss.

You see in me a pessimist, I see reality rubbed raw,
You ask me "where's your optimism" but can't see the dreams I draw,
From the past until its over, from embrace until release,
You'll always be my beauty, I'll always be your beast.

You'll always be the one I cry for, the loss I feel the most,
You'll always be the angel, be the wonder, be the one,
You'll always have a place to hide, within this hollow ghost,
You'll always be the one I die for, when all my hope has gone.
©2008-2009 ~TaintedEcho
:icontaintedecho:

Author's Comments

Wish I could spend more time working on this, haven't felt so intensive about writing in...a long time...

An honest piece, when honesty is asked for in my writing, I'll give it freely.

Not sure how I feel about this piece, think as a song it could do with a lot more work, hope it works as an expression of feeling

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:icondarkened-crucifix:
It's beautiful =)
Your writign is truly amazing!

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Enslaved [Broken] Yours
:iconfreakystar:
"You see in me a pessimist, I see reality rubbed raw,
You ask me "where's your optimism" but can't see the dreams I draw,
From the past until its over, from embrace until release,
You'll always be my beauty, I'll always be your beast."

I love this part...
:iconlady-amandria:
Very touching, I have to agree with FS and D-C
wont deny that it could use work, 2nd verse doesn't seem to flow as well, but still all in all 'you'reawesomeyou'reawesomyou'reawesome' you have always written beautiful peieces

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So you want to hold me up and bring me down
Yes, you want to hold me up and break me down
I don't care for your sweet scent
Or the way you want me more than I want you
:icontaintedecho:
:) thankies hun, took me a little time to get those lines to feel right for me, I knew the phrasing for it...just needed to work out the pacing...think I managed it
:icontaintedecho:
Really? Verse two flows quite well as I read it...think its the last bit that throws me...but I've always felt uncomfortable with rhyming schemes like that...

Thanks for the comments :)
:iconinsanity-streak:
lovely. this is very raw emotion and i love that it comes out through your writing so strongly for mine it just comes out as jibberish that i have to edit 100000 times... i really like the repetition in the last stanza especially!

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Buffy: Angel
Angel: Buffy
Xander: Xander
:icontaintedecho:
Was a genuine reply so was rather emotional at this point. The one eye line was actually what I was doing while I was writing it. Was rather pleased that it slid in so well lol.

Thanks for the comment (The next however many of my replies are probably not going to say all that I want them to say as I'm making a concerted effort at replying to all your comments so I apologise in advance)

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